After deciding which entry to work on, I went through the texts we have been using for the class. I decided to use a few things from Lehman's Reviving Disengaged Writers, and Fletcher and Portalupi's Craft Lessons. After making these decisions, I filled in the Planning and Target Skills Worksheet:
I wanted to try out Lehman's ideas for "Revising Revision" by making notes right on the writing. I also wanted to use more dialogue and try to add some interior monologue in my writing. I took a packet of yellow sticky notes and cut some in half. I made notes on ways I could add both of these things into my writing. I also wanted to make sure that the reader got a feeling about my personality as he/she read my piece.
After figuring out ways I wanted to enhance my writing, I decided that I wanted to make my corrections on a typed version of my piece. I decided to type the original as written in my notebook, so I would have a copy of the original.
Then I used similar techniques to those described by Dr. Barrentine to make my desired corrections on my text. I actually found myself making more changes than were originally in my notes.
I am going to admit that I really enjoyed this process. I found it interesting to make my corrections directly on the piece while leaving the original writing there. This allowed me a good visual of the changes I was making.
Finally, I made my changes and came up with a new draft of my writing.
There are a few things I could see changing in another draft. First of all, I am not really sold on the title...it's a little harsher than the quip at the end of the piece. Secondly, I would like to consider changing the end and adding a continuation of the conversation from the beginning. Finally, I still want to work more with interior monologue. It just didn't work as well in this piece as I thought it would.
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